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fallen_fairy425
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Age : 28
Location : In the dark, but I can still see you!!!
Age : 16
Writing forte/s : poetry
Registration date : 2006-08-17

PostSubject: Unspoken   Thu Aug 17, 2006 7:48 pm

Unspoken

Tears glide down her cheeks,
How can this hurt when itís been four weeks.
they say time heals all pain,
But since she left all it has done is rain.

She left to show him how much he would loose,
But it looks like she isnít the one he will choose.
Heís rather be with miss put out,
than be with her bored without a doubt.

But was wanting to be loved and cherished too much?
Or was all he looking for was just that sexy touch?
It seems he loved her body more than her mind.
Why does it seem that men are all of this kind?

Trusting someone enough to fall in love and give him her heart,
wasnít easy but it wasnít the toughest part.
the toughest was saying sheíd had enough with his game,
then walking out with her pride and feeling no shame.

Her heart still aches with wanting what he was before,
but there is no going and reopening the door.
he once was different but now he is the same as the rest,
the same as those who cheated and left an ache in her chest.

It is said that good things come to those who wait,
but will she have the strength to go on another date?
For now at least the answer is no,
and for now she will allow her tears to flow.

Her tears arenít tears of remorse ,
they are just tears that will put her back on course.
even feeling like her wings are broken,
she lifts her tear stained face and leaves the rest unspoken.
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Acinonyx Jubatus
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Age : 28
Location : North Carolina
Age : 16
Writing forte/s : Science-fiction
Registration date : 2006-08-11

PostSubject: Re: Unspoken   Fri Aug 25, 2006 6:55 pm

I liked it, though it was a little to sad for my taste. But, I loved the rhyming couplets. You made them work very well. Great poem.
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