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Lachrymose_Emily3
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Age : Nine
Writing forte/s : Poetry
Registration date : 2006-08-13

PostSubject: Ice haert   Mon Aug 14, 2006 4:43 am

The blossom falls from the trees
And scatters on the ground.


I file like I have an Ice heart,
And it is slowly melting like life around me.


I am distort and desperate,
I cry every day and I will for the rest of my life.



By Emily

Aged nine years.







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Female Number of posts : 218
Age : 26
Location : Powell River B.C, Canada
Age : 14
Writing forte/s : Horror and Poems
Registration date : 2006-08-11

PostSubject: Re: Ice haert   Mon Aug 14, 2006 10:04 am

WEll, The spaces are not needed nor are the . caus eit makes the flow go off but other then that I loved it
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Female Number of posts : 146
Age : 26
Location : England
Age : Thirteen
Writing forte/s : Weird poetry and awful stories!
Registration date : 2006-08-11

PostSubject: Re: Ice haert   Mon Aug 14, 2006 12:37 pm

The blossom falls from the trees
And scatters on the ground.
I feellike I have an ice heart,
And it is slowly melting like ? life around me.
I am distraught and desperate,
I cry every day and I will for the rest of my life.

PLEASE LET ME CHECK YOUR SPELLINGS COOKIE, PLEASE!!!!
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