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PostSubject: My Willow Tree   Mon Aug 14, 2006 4:20 am

I sit next to my willow tree many an hour a day.

My life would be so miserable without my willow tree.


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PostSubject: Re: My Willow Tree   Mon Aug 14, 2006 4:21 am

sunny sunny sunny sunny Sleep Sleep Sleep pig pig pig cat cat cat I now it's not good.
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PostSubject: Re: My Willow Tree   Mon Aug 14, 2006 9:36 am

Hunnibunch, you've over-edited! It was longer before wasn't it? anyway, i love these two lines but you need to bulk up the middle a bit more. :-) Good work!
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PostSubject: Re: My Willow Tree   Mon Aug 14, 2006 10:06 am

It isn't really a poem it is more of something you would say to yuor tree it needs more and the . are not needed Smile
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PostSubject: Re: My Willow Tree   Mon Aug 14, 2006 11:19 am

yeah i agree with the other two, it needs lengthening but its a sweet idea :]

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PostSubject: Re: My Willow Tree   Mon Aug 14, 2006 12:38 pm

Where is this willow tree anyway? Is it like, in your head?
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