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AngelWithTheScabbedWings
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PostSubject: Run away   Sat Aug 12, 2006 11:14 pm

The tears are like acid stinging your eyes
The hate for yourself runs through your soul
Youíve had to much
You canít take it
Your mind is screaming run away
Your love is telling you go
No one wants you
Just run away from home
Run away from yourself
Run away from the old you

Ya.. I was crying makeing this poem that is where I got the acid tears cause it hurt like a bitch.


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PostSubject: Re: Run away   Sun Aug 13, 2006 5:03 am

powerful poem
strange rhythm but it works well

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PostSubject: Re: Run away   Sun Aug 13, 2006 6:58 am

omg, that was good ... yeah ... i liked the rythmn ... this is just amazing ... as always ur poems rocks!
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PostSubject: Re: Run away   Sun Aug 13, 2006 3:01 pm

I prefured it at the start, I really like the line about acid tears. The last two lines seemed a bit odd but altogether well done! I could feel a lot of emotion in it. :-)
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PostSubject: Re: Run away   Mon Aug 14, 2006 4:41 am

That was graet i wish i could write like that i a do a few but they're not as good as that.[/b] Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Run away   Mon Aug 14, 2006 10:04 am

Thanks Smile I added a last line so it makes more sence
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