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Age : 28
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Writing forte/s : Comedy, Poems, paper articles based on opinions
Registration date : 2006-08-11

PostSubject: Why I love black.   Fri Aug 11, 2006 12:48 pm

Black is what I see at night,
Black is what I see at the end of a fight.
No other color is there after an argument.
No other color runs down the white bathtub.
When you try and stare it in the eyes,
Black is all you'll see.
It's the color I will see when I die.
I guess I like black,
Because it is destined for me.
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PostSubject: Re: Why I love black.   Fri Aug 11, 2006 12:52 pm

Um wow........... Your avatar scares the hell out of me but th epoem was good. I see nothing rong with it
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PostSubject: Re: Why I love black.   Fri Aug 11, 2006 1:00 pm

i agree...the avatar is scary but the poem is good.

maybe try and shorten the second line a little?

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PostSubject: Re: Why I love black.   Fri Aug 11, 2006 1:08 pm

Yeah, rhythm is a slight problem. But it's pretty cool and the idea is a great one! cheers
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PostSubject: Re: Why I love black.   Sun Aug 13, 2006 5:03 am

I agree with everyone else there. The rythm in the second line is a bit funny, but overall it's good. Smile It's a good idea for a poem.

And yeah, your avatar gives me the creeps. pale
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PostSubject: Re: Why I love black.   Thu Aug 17, 2006 7:33 pm

LOL i guess Im the only one besides you that likes the avatar! *shrugs* oh well. I agree about the rhyme in the second line but no biggie the poem itself is still awesome!
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